1. Opening Hook
Right now, your intro is informative, but you could make it more captivating with a vivid image or surprising fact:

“Imagine a creature so large it can outweigh a car, yet so oddly shaped it looks like half a fish. Meet the ocean sunfish, or Mola mola — the ocean’s gentle giant, a drifting mystery of the seas.”
This invites curiosity while setting the tone.

2. Flow & Style

You’ve got numbered sections (1–9), which is excellent for clarity. To make it more narrative and smooth, you might weave in some transitions between sections — e.g., “From its tiny, fragile beginnings, the sunfish grows into one of the ocean’s most prolific breeders…”
Keep key details, but trim repetition (for example, weight/size is mentioned in both intro and section 1).
3. Enrich with Colorful Anecdotes

Sprinkling in moments of wonder helps:

Sailors once thought sunfish were “drifting sea monsters” because they would float on their sides to sunbathe.
Despite their clumsy look, they’re known to dive hundreds of meters deep to hunt squid.
4. Threats & Conservation
This section is already strong. You could boost impact by briefly quantifying:

How many sunfish are caught as bycatch yearly (estimates exist).
Which regions are most critical for their protection.
This makes the conservation urgency sharper.
5. Closing Call-to-Action
End with something memorable:

“The ocean sunfish reminds us that beauty doesn’t always come in sleek forms. Protecting it means preserving the ocean’s balance — and keeping alive one of nature’s strangest marvels.”